I get told all the time that I dont use enough full-stops, instead opting for a 'stream of consciousness' type sentence, that can get very muddled at times. Definitely okay you did this! it's the whole point of the blog!

Thanks for the link. I'm glad you're enjoyign my fiction.

Can I give you a little constructive advice? You have some great descriptive language in these two paragraphs but what really gets in the way of the image is your sentences run on too long. You use a lot of commas and don't stop often enough. This makes it hard to follow and impedes visualization. You also need to do a bit of editing. When in doubt, be sparse and use a full stop.

Example of a rewrite:

"He looked to his left and right again as they approached the Giga Studio. It expanded out into the desert for miles, the structure epic in scale. He grabbed at quick thoughts on how it stood, gargantuan like, in the desert, dominating nature. He could just make out the sloping sides of the building, and stopped to look up, learning back on his heals to get the whole building in. ,He remembered how he’d once seen one from a distance. The Hovertrain had broken down and his cell walls had gone translucent and there it was almost beyond the breadth of his imagination. (I really wasn't sure what you were trying to say at the end of this paragraph so that's what I mean by long sentences let our meaning down)

Richard, I hope it's okay that I've chirped up here. I'm just trying to help. I think we writers must practise, practise, practise and use every advice and tool we can to improve.

Enjoy your writing.

:) Kelly